The Basic Pitch Formula for Novelists

At the Midwest Writers Workshop, an agent panel gave some wonderful, straightforward advice about how to construct your pitch. You could use this formula as part of a query letter or in a live pitch. Brilliant!

Option 1

I have a completed [word count][genre] titled [title] about [protagonist name + small description] who [conflict].

Option 2

(1) What does your character want?
(2) Why does he want it?
(3) What keeps him from getting it?

Option 3

(1) Character name/description
(2) The conflict they’re going through
(3) The choices they have to make

4 best resources on query letter writing + identifying agents to query

QueryShark (opportunity to get your query critiqued + read others critiqued)
AgentQuery
PublishersMarketplace (for in-depth info on agents + publishing deals, costs $20/year)
Agency websites (as you begin to select and customize your queries and submissions for each agent appropriate for your work)

Other tips

Think of your query letter to the agent/editor as the first step in the SEDUCTION process.
Never say: “Let me start by telling you the backstory.” Your story doesn’t start in the right place if that’s necessary.
If you must mention 4+ characters in your pitch for it to make sense, you probably have some problems with the story.
The voice in the pitch should match the mood of the story.
Only start querying when you’d be comfortable with your manuscript appearing as-is (and being sold) between covers on major chain bookstore shelf.
It’s better to pitch a standalone novel “with series potential” (rather than pitching it as a series).
Looking for more? Check out Ortiz’s synopsis advice.

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Cynthia Morris

Thanks for this, Jane. It reminds me to focus on the conflict, which I forget to do. I think in life we’re generally conflict averse, so it’s hard to remember to lead with the drama when talking about our novels.

Very helpful, thank you!

Are you a Libra? I am! 😉

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Carina Burns

Thank you Jane:-) May I share this on FB, Twitter and my website?

On another note, I read many years back that good plotting dictates that you begin your story at the point closest to the incident that will forever change the life of the protagonist.

I’m re-editing Chapter 4 of my memoir. This chapter will include the call to adventure/my refusal to the call…i.e., the incident that forever changes my life in my memoir. If I have 20 pages per chapter and roughly 10-12 chapters total, I’m wondering if this is appropriate as I am writing chronologically!

Kindest regards,
Carina

Absolutely, please share however you like!

Regarding the plot/structure of your memoir, yes! The “inciting incident” (when everything gets turned upside down. e.g., in Star Wars, this would be when Luke leaves home when his family is killed) should typically happen within the first few chapters. There are some wonderful books that discuss the finer details of this, and one of the best is PLOT & STRUCTURE by James Scott Bell, which is for novelists, but can also be applied to memoirs. Highly recommend.

crwills

THanks Jane this is great. I love it when advice is simple and good at the same time. I followed you here from Writer Unboxed. Looking forward to more good stuff. Good luck.

Thanks so much for following me here! Much appreciated. 🙂

A C. Ellis

Great stuff, Jane!

With your permission I, too, will share this in a few places.

Absolutely!

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Sktisdale

Thanks for the info! Very helpful information.

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